Blog # 9

April 16, 2008 cola87

I think that two strengths of my paper are the facts as well as my voice. I took what I was learning and tried to put it in a way that i felt my audience would relate to and be interested in. I think that the addition of my own personal experiences makes the piece more believable and attention grabbing.

Two weakness would be my formating and lack of results. I have yet to reeive my results from everyone so that part of the paper is missing. I also know that my formatting is horrible. I need to definately go back and fix that. I will probably have a much better paper once the formatting is changed.

I want to change a few thing I think. I like my voice, but I want more quotes from people who have done more research. I think that my original research is something that is realling bringing my paper together. My audience is the same as those that I surveyed, so to hear their voices as well as mind helps to drive my pint across.